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C r u m b l e



Hundreds of memories
slide off my face
as fast as his lips catch them.

His fingertips wipe my nose;
it is red like
the inside of a steak.

Our bodies are intertwined,
pressed up against flowery wallpaper
that smells like mothballs.
Our crotches are
pressed fervently together.

I would be aroused
if only...

A wail escapes my mouth.
He smothers it
with a kiss.

My lips tremble.

\"I hate seeing you cry,\"
he whispers,
cradling my head
between his warm, damp hands.

He pulls back and sighs.

It\'s time.

He must go.

A shakey hand pushes
the elevator button.

Down.

The arrow is red.
The colour of blood
and of passion.

The elevator chimes
like a death sentence.
He steps in.

Our clasped hands
break pathetically,
our arms swinging down
beside our own bodies.

Already I can taste the lonliness
in my mouth.

I squeeze my eyes shut
against the tears
and my hand covers
my lips
to stop my scream.

He attempts a weak smile.

My lips try to form
three small words
but my tongue cannot
push them out in time.

The elevator doors close
with finality.

I cannot hear the squeek
of the elevator descending
through my sobs.




I crumble.
©2003-2009 ~unnoticed
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Author's Comments

This is very personal to me, as it was written the night before I left Illinois after having come to see my boyfriend. He lives in Illinois, I live in the west coast of Canada.

The number of times we say "goodbye" doesn't make it any easier.

Written March 2003.

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its so emotional, its alot like a story i kept waiting for what you were going to say next and the whole thing put a sad but awsome picture in my head, the only thing i dislike is the reference to steak but wow overall great work

~michelle~

check out my work

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Nobody becomes an artist unless they have to.
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You should have more comments, but it seems around here its a popularity contest and the poetry section is on the losing end.

You captured a moment so perfectly, I admire your honesty and I think this is amazing...

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What sick ridiculous puppets we are and what a gross little stage we dance upon, what fun we have dancing, fucking, not a care in the world, not knowing we are nothing, we are not what was intended.
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Crying

This is just beautiful! An excellent description of what it feels like to say goodbye, encased in a nice and tidy vignette. Wonderfully spoken.

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